On the holidays Me and my Sister went to the snow down by Turangi. It was the mountain just before national park. When we first got there we play across the road from the car park. Then when we finished there we went and caught the bus up to the chair lift we caught it down to happy valley and then we got a sled. When we got our sled we went to the the sled area.We watch a few people and then we went for a turn, to stop the sled you have to put your feet out on the snow. But we didn't have to because there was a hill that had mats to stop you. We played there for about 2 hours.
Great improvement, Freedom. I would like to see the layout of your photo and text edited.
ReplyDeleteHi Freedom my name is Nio and I go to Waima Kura I'm a Year 8. I hope you had fun while you were at the snow. I would like to say keep it up with the good writing because it was interesting to read.
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ReplyDeleteHi Freedom my name is Maihi and I go to Waima Kura and I am a year 5. I like the way you wrote about the snow. I haven’t been to the snow, but next year I will be going to the snow as part of our senior school trip. I am looking forward to this trip. I hope you keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHi Freedom my name is Maihi and I go to Waima Kura and I am a year 5. I like the way you wrote about the snow. I haven’t been to the snow, but next year I will be going to the snow as part of our senior school trip. I am looking forward to this trip. I hope you keep up the good work.
Kia ora Freedom it's Hunter I go to Waima School I am year 6. I hope you and Brooklyn had a good time at the snow in Turangi by National Park. I like the way you wrote your story I've never been to the snow so you beat me. Keep the good work up.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Freedom it's Hunter I go to Waima School I am year 6. I hope you and Brooklyn had a good time at the snow in Turangi by National Park. I like the way you wrote your story I've never been to the snow so you beat me. Keep the good work up.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Hunter Thank you for the kind comment. This makes me want to work harder and improve.I hope you had a great holiday too.
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